[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Fri, 06 January 2017 00:11 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-01-05
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
-I find the document could be clearer if put in context with other documents related to the topic/if any.
-By eCall do we mean voice and video calls? (is emergency sms another possibility?)

Nits/editorial comments:
-General: "next-generation eCall" and "NG-eCall" are both used. Would be clearer to use only one.
-[Page 10], "PSAP interpets"--typo-->"PSAP interprets"
-[Page 13], "package to accomodate"--typo-->"package to accommodate"
-[Page 17], "how it it used"----->"how it is used"
-[Page 17], "when it is is required"----->"when it is required"
-[Page 18], "it is is required"----->"it is required"  (two occurrences)
-[Page 18], "how it it used."----->"how it is used." (two occurrences)
-[Page 37], "Based on the the"---->"Based on the"




Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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