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Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Sat, 27 June 2020 05:55 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2020-05-26
IETF LC End Date: 2020-05-25
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.


Major issues:


Minor issues:
Is it possible to add in the abstract and or intro where the info of the topology information is to be used?
Maybe borrowing some text from RFC8345.


Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 21], Section 6, "NMDA-complient"---->"NMDA-compliant"

Best Regards,
Meral
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