Re: [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-6man-ndpioiana-02

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Tue, 03 April 2018 17:38 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-6man-ndpioiana-02
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Dan, thanks for your review. I agree with your point about normatively referencing RFC 6275; I think your other points may be taken up at the authors’ discretion. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa

> On Feb 26, 2018, at 12:01 PM, Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> wrote:
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> Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
> Review result: Almost Ready
> 
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> Document: draft-ietf-6man-ndpioiana-02
> Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
> Review Date: 2018-02-26
> IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-06
> IESG Telechat date: 2018-04-05
> 
> Summary:
> 
> This is a simple and straightforward document, fixing an omission in RFC 6275,
> which updated RFC 4861 without explicitly marking it as such,  and failed to
> create a registry to avoid conflicts. The content of the document looks fine,
> but there are several minor issues that I would recommend to be considered and
> discussed before approval and publication.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> 1. As this document fixes a problem created by RFC 6275 which was was not
> marked as updating RFC 4861, and did not create a registry to avoid conflicts,
> it looks like this RFC (if approved) should also update RFC 6275.
> 
> 2. Section 3 includes a reference to [IANA-TBD] which is not defined in the
> document.
> 
> 3. As the new registry contains one bit defined by RFC 6275, it seems that
> [RFC6275] should also be a Normative Reference.
> 
> 4. Section 4 - It would be good to capitalize Standards Action, and refer to
> RFC 8126 as reference (also to be added)
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> 1. The Abstract and the Introduction contain a sentence with broken syntax:
> 
> 'The purpose of this document is to request that IANA to create a new registry
> ...'
> 
> 2. Several acronyms in the document are not explicitly expanded: ND, PIO, NDP
> 
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