Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09

[Stephen Farrell <[e-mail]>]

On 25/11/2020 11:46, Mohit Sethi via Datatracker wrote:
> Reviewer: Mohit Sethi
> Review result: Ready

Thanks. Will look at those nits when next editing.

Cheers,
S.

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> Document: draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09
> Reviewer: Mohit Sethi
> Review Date: 2020-11-25
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-11-30
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary: This document deprecates older versions of TLS and DTLS. It also
> updates many RFCs that normatively refer to the older TLS/DTLS versions.
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: In section 1.1, typo in "waas defined to detect".
> 
> Most references to RFCs are of the form "[RFC7507]". Can we change "RFC 7457
> [RFC7457]" to "[RFC7457]" for uniformity. Similarly, perhaps you could change
> "RFC5246 [RFC5246]" and "RFC4346 [RFC4346]" to "[RFC5246]" and "[RFC4346]".
> 
> In section 2 "NIST for example have provided " should be "..has provided...".
> 
> In section 6 "this document is called out specifically to update text
> implementing the deprecation  recommendations of this document." I was
> initially confused with the repeated usage of "this". Perhaps it would help to
> be more explicit.
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