Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-09.txt

[Jonas Ahlberg <[e-mail]>]

Hi Francis,

Thanks for your review.

We have now submitted a new version of the draft with the following changes that we hope address your feedback :
- The date of the models have been updated to the same date as the draft
- There is now a single space before all "{" in the draft
- the comments have been removed from the JSON examples. The description leaf is enough to explain what the entry refers to.
- I've tried to correct the usage of commas in the JSON examples. Please let me know if it's still not fully correct.
- "(ESP)" is removed
- " Maintained by IANA?: N" has been added for all modules in the IANA considerations, according to earlier feedback from IANA

Regards
JonasA

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A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-10.txt has been successfully submitted by Jonas Ahlberg and posted to the IETF repository.

Name:		draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang
Revision:	10
Title:		A YANG Data Model for Microwave Radio Link
Document date:	2018-10-03
Group:		ccamp
Pages:		51
URL:            https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-10.txt
Status:         https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang/
Htmlized:       https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-10
Htmlized:       https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang
Diff:           https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-10

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From: Francis Dupont <[e-mail]> 
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Subject: review of draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-09.txt

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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20180926
IETF LC End Date: 20181002
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 The yang model mixes config, state and actions, not like the others I know. But if the Yang experts have no concern I have none too...

 - 4 page 7: I notices the date of the model is 2018-06-30 when
  it was modified the 2018-08-31. I don't know the rule, perhaps
  the date is updated just before publication? Not an issue by itself.

 - action manual-switch-working page 30 and many others: please add a
  space before '{'.

 - A.1 page 46: the JSON is not valid (even it is readable) and I am afraid
  it is really JSON and not something JSON like. In detail:
   // does not begin comments in JSON (there are no comments in fact
   in JSON so IMHO it is not a real problem :-)
   extra commas (more an issue)

 - A.1 page 46: please add a space in "single":{

 - same comments about A.2 pages 47 and 48, and A.3 pages 48-50
  (with BTW two "single":{)

 - B page 50: Spain (ESP) -> Spain

Regards

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