[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12

Matthew Miller <linuxwolf+ietf@outer-planes.net> Thu, 03 January 2019 03:29 UTC

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Reviewer: Matthew Miller
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-transition-ipv4aas-12
Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
Review Date: 2019-01-02
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-14
IESG Telechat date: 2019-01-10

Summary:  This document is ready to be published as Informational,
but has some nits that should be addressed before publication.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issue:

There are some instances within the main content that RFC 2119
keywords are present as lower case. If these are intentional, then
RFC 8174 needs to be applied.

Nits/editorial comments: 

* In section 1. "Introduction" (and its subsections), the term "IPv6
Transition CE Router" is not preceded with a definite or indefinite
article, although it is throughout the rest of this document.
* In section 1. "Introduction", the phrase "prohibitive expense"
ought to be "prohibitively expensive".
* In section 7. "Code Considerations", the word "neither" might be
better as "nor" in the phrase "in terms of RAM memory, neither
other hardware requirements".
* In section 7. "Code Considerations", there seems to be a misplaced
coma; "cost of NAT44 code so, existing hardware supports them with
minimal impact" reads better as "cost of NAT44 code, so existing
hardware supports them with minimal impact".
* In section 11. "Annex A: Usage Scenarios", the comma seems
unneeded in the phrase "another CE behind it, takes care of that".
* In section 12. "Annex B: End-User Network Architecture", the
term "end-user" should be used consistently, it is sometimes
"end user".