[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-04

Roni Even via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Fri, 02 April 2021 07:58 UTC

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Reviewer: Roni Even
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-??
Reviewer: Roni Even
Review Date: 2021-04-02
IETF LC End Date: None
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:
This is an early review of the draft. I find the 04 version easy to understand
but have one comment

Major issues:

Minor issues:
the last paragraph in the abstract , mostly the last sentence " RFC 4303
remains the authoritative description." should be in my opinion in the main
body of the document and not only in the abstract. I also see some difference
between the document and RFC4303

Nits/editorial comments: