[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-04
Roni Even via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Fri, 02 April 2021 07:58 UTC
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Reviewer: Roni Even Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-lwig-minimal-esp-?? Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date: 2021-04-02 IETF LC End Date: None IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: This is an early review of the draft. I find the 04 version easy to understand but have one comment Major issues: Minor issues: the last paragraph in the abstract , mostly the last sentence " RFC 4303 remains the authoritative description." should be in my opinion in the main body of the document and not only in the abstract. I also see some difference between the document and RFC4303 Nits/editorial comments:
- [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-l… Roni Even via Datatracker
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Daniel Migault
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Roni Even
- Re: [Gen-art] [Lwip] Genart last call review of d… Daniel Migault
- Re: [Gen-art] [Lwip] Genart last call review of d… Daniel Migault
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Lars Eggert