[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13
Robert Sparks via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 10 April 2019 16:17 UTC
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Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review result: Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13 Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review Date: 2019-04-10 IETF LC End Date: 2019-04-12 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard Nits/editorial comments: The abstract is quite terse. Please consider expanding it to something that stands better by itself. The sentence that starts "Driving these requirements" in the introduction does not follow where it sits in the paragraph. There is no antecedent for "these requirements". I suggest replacing the sentence with "Requirements for these mechanisms are captured in [RFC7923]. The second sentence in the first paragraph of section 3 is a run-on. I suggest s/2.4, the/2.4. The/
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