Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

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Hi Meral,

Thank you for the review.

Please see inline.

Cheers,
Med

De : Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com]
Envoyé : samedi 27 juin 2020 08:13
À : draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
Objet : Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2020-*06-26
IETF LC End Date: 2020-*06-25
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.


Major issues:


Minor issues:
Is it possible to add in the abstract and or intro where the info of the topology information is to be used?
Maybe borrowing some text from RFC8345.

[Med] We have already updated the abstract as per a comment from Stig. See. https://github.com/boucadair/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology/blob/master/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14.txt. We will see how to make it better.

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 21], Section 6, "NMDA-complient"---->"NMDA-compliant"

[Med] Thanks. FYI, we will remove that paragraph to better structure the security section in light of the comments from the secdir.

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
Research
www.ericsson.com


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