Return-Path: X-Original-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 76F1412D0AA for ; Tue, 5 Jul 2016 08:46:39 -0700 (PDT) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -4.201 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-4.201 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, RCVD_IN_DNSWL_MED=-2.3, RCVD_IN_MSPIKE_H2=-0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id uTRGaejFBDSJ for ; Tue, 5 Jul 2016 08:46:37 -0700 (PDT) Received: from usplmg21.ericsson.net (usplmg21.ericsson.net [198.24.6.65]) (using TLSv1 with cipher DHE-RSA-AES256-SHA (256/256 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id BF2A712D0EB for ; Tue, 5 Jul 2016 08:46:36 -0700 (PDT) X-AuditID: c6180641-f796f6d000000e1e-e7-577bd61a6d31 Received: from EUSAAHC002.ericsson.se (Unknown_Domain [147.117.188.78]) by usplmg21.ericsson.net (Symantec Mail Security) with SMTP id B4.1D.03614.A16DB775; Tue, 5 Jul 2016 17:45:30 +0200 (CEST) Received: from EUSAAMB107.ericsson.se ([147.117.188.124]) by EUSAAHC002.ericsson.se ([147.117.188.78]) with mapi id 14.03.0294.000; Tue, 5 Jul 2016 11:46:35 -0400 From: Meral Shirazipour To: "draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness.all@tools.ietf.org" , "gen-art@ietf.org" Thread-Topic: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03 Thread-Index: AdHW0802DzrcZCKMRWCrf5R64bZmCg== Date: Tue, 5 Jul 2016 15:46:35 +0000 Message-ID: Accept-Language: en-US Content-Language: en-US X-MS-Has-Attach: X-MS-TNEF-Correlator: x-originating-ip: [147.117.188.10] Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="_000_ABCAA4EF18F17B4FB619EA93DEF7939A4E665CDBeusaamb107erics_" MIME-Version: 1.0 X-Brightmail-Tracker: H4sIAAAAAAAAA+NgFvrILMWRmVeSWpSXmKPExsUyuXSPn67Utepwg/8NChbr+68zW1x99ZnF gcljyZKfTB5fLn9mC2CK4rJJSc3JLEst0rdL4Mo4c/gWU8EfnYqNnZ2sDYzn1LsYOTkkBEwk nnXcZoWwxSQu3FvP1sXIxSEkcJRR4s/ddawQzjJGicU929lBqtgELCS2/34OlhARmMMoMWt7 O1i7sICnxNpJa1hAbBGBAIk3K9YzQ9h6Ei8br7GB2CwCKhI79rWCxXkFfCW+HTsJZjMCrf5+ ag0TiM0sIC5x68l8JoiTBCSW7DnPDGGLSrx8/A/qVCWJSUvPsULU50vcWf2GFWKmoMTJmU9Y JjAKzUIyahaSsllIyiDiOhILdn9ig7C1JZYtfM0MY5858JgJWXwBI/sqRo7S4oKc3HQjw02M wIg4JsHmuINxb6/nIUYBDkYlHl6FJVXhQqyJZcWVuYcYJTiYlUR4r16sDhfiTUmsrEotyo8v Ks1JLT7EKM3BoiTOq/9SMVxIID2xJDU7NbUgtQgmy8TBKdXAaJ3de0D5G0u2N2NQ8OpX5f57 jqatZfz+oejZrB+bfRccUukq9wzobvQLbehdk621tGHfqjUyBitf8dpqXnnZ+rjT+M7bm0/e p1+ze1vkvPo0P0/tkZWt+3z7I0V8Ph2UStz4/19fpY+L723zKYt0rKc+Lox8wGaivEh93ZPb bi4ykmwr3vxer8RSnJFoqMVcVJwIAG/lRnyEAgAA Archived-At: Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03 X-BeenThere: gen-art@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.17 Precedence: list List-Id: "GEN-ART: General Area Review Team" List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Tue, 05 Jul 2016 15:46:39 -0000 --_000_ABCAA4EF18F17B4FB619EA93DEF7939A4E665CDBeusaamb107erics_ Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review = Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for t= he IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call c= omments. For more information, please see the FAQ at . Document: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2016-07-05 IETF LC End Date: 2016-07-08 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 2], "arguable be better"---->"arguably be better" -[Page 2], "types know"---->"types known" -[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice? -[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to be u= pdated to latest version. -Also on [Page 4] Reference to "section 4.1.2.1" of [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bi= s], it would be good to list the section title too (in case the numbering c= hanges in the final version). Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com --_000_ABCAA4EF18F17B4FB619EA93DEF7939A4E665CDBeusaamb107erics_ Content-Type: text/html; charset="us-ascii" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. T= he General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being proc= essed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments jus= t like any other last call comments.

 

For more information, please see the FAQ at <http= ://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

 

 

Document:  draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03=

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2016-07-05

IETF LC End Date:  2016-07-08

IESG Telechat date: NA

 

 

Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I= have some comments.

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

 

Nits/editorial comments:

-[Page 2], "arguable be better"---->&qu= ot;arguably be better"

-[Page 2], "types know"---->"types= known"

-[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, = is that by choice?

-[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-= ice-rfc5245bis])to be updated to latest version.

-Also on [Page 4] Referen= ce to "section 4.1.2.1" of [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be= good to list the section title too (in case the numbering changes in the f= inal version).

 

Best Regards,

Meral

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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson Research

www.ericsson.com

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