Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13

Meral, thanks for your review. All, thanks for your responses. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa

> On Jun 27, 2020, at 4:08 AM, mohamed.boucadair@orange.com wrote:
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> Hi Meral,
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> Thank you for the review.
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> Please see inline.
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> Cheers,
> Med
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> De : Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com <mailto:meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>] 
> Envoyé : samedi 27 juin 2020 08:13
> À : draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org <mailto:draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology.all@ietf.org>; gen-art@ietf.org <mailto:gen-art@ietf.org>
> Objet : Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13
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> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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> For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>>.
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> Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-13
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> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2020-*06-26
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-*06-25
> IESG Telechat date: NA
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> Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.
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> Major issues:
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> Minor issues:
> Is it possible to add in the abstract and or intro where the info of the topology information is to be used?
> Maybe borrowing some text from RFC8345.
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> [Med] We have already updated the abstract as per a comment from Stig. See. https://github.com/boucadair/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology/blob/master/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14.txt <https://github.com/boucadair/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology/blob/master/draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14.txt>. We will see how to make it better.
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> Nits/editorial comments:
> [Page 21], Section 6, "NMDA-complient"---->"NMDA-compliant"
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> [Med] Thanks. FYI, we will remove that paragraph to better structure the security section in light of the comments from the secdir.
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> Best Regards,
> Meral
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> Meral Shirazipour
> Ericsson
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