[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06

Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com> Tue, 20 November 2018 16:21 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06

Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2018-11-20
IETF LC End Date: 2018-11-20
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:  Almost ready.  The document registers (under the RFC 8288 registry)
link relation types for service document, service description, service
metadata, and service status.  It's missing a key section.

Major issues: None.

Minor issues:

Page 8, Section 7: RFC 2223 requires you do more than provide an ellipsis here.
 You might want to consider what makes sense.  Perhaps a discussion of what
happens to a client that obtains a maliciously formatted service-desc or even
an errant service-desc.  While a human might be able to see through problems in
a "service-doc", it's quite possible that a machine will want to take
precautions about handling the received data and acting upon it.

Nits/editorial comments:

Page 1, Note to Readers: Presumably this section will be removed prior to
publication.

Page 3, 4th full paragraph, 1st sentence: Delete the comma after "consumption"
and delete the "for" following that.

Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 1st section: change "of" to "between".  Put
the section references in parentheses.

Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "a" before "better".

[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wilde-… Peter Yee
Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wi… Erik Wilde
Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wi… Alissa Cooper