[Gen-art] Genart Last Call review: draft-ietf-6man-grand

Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> Thu, 17 June 2021 08:43 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Genart Last Call review: draft-ietf-6man-grand
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Hi,

Due to a system glitch I cannot enter my reviews via the tool. Until this
is fixed, here are my early comments to draft-ietf-6man-grand, which was
assigned to me.

Version Reviewed - 04
State: Ready with Editorial Comments

This is a very well written document. I appreciate the section describing
the other Solutions Considered, which is a good guidance and reference for
future discussions and extensions.

I have two editorial comments only:

1. In Section 3 the Normative Language with capitalizations is used to
describe requirements from solutions. This seems quite unnecessary, and
certainly cannot be verified for conformance.
2. I would suggest moving or copying the first sentence in Section 6 (that
says that all normative text in the memo can be found in this section) in
the Introduction section.

Thanks and regards,

Dan