Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-yang-data-model-14

[Laurent Toutain <[e-mail]>]

Hi Meral,

Thanks for the comments.

On Thu, Jul 28, 2022 at 12:01 AM Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker <
[e-mail]> wrote:

> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
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> Document: draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-yang-data-model-14
> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2022-07-27
> IETF LC End Date: 2022-08-02
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
>
> Summary: This draft is almost ready to be published as Standards Track RFC.
>
> Major issues:
>
> Minor issues:
> In Intro section please clarify benefits of this RFC formalizing the
> description of the compression rules. :
>
> "The goal of this document is to formalize the description of the rules to
> offer" to allow X Y Z ?
>

There is a brief description in the introduction. I added few words in the
abstract:for -15

This document formalizes the description of the rules for better
interoperability between SCHC instances either
to exchange a set of rules or to modify some rules parameters.




>
> Nits/editorial comments:
> [Page 3], Section 3, Typo
> "options definied"-->"options defined"
>

done

>
> [Page 3], Section 3, Typo
> "serveur"-->"server"
>

done


>
> [Page 6], Section 3.7, Typo
> "same enconding."-->"same encoding."
>

done

>
> [Page 7], Section 3.10.1, Typo
> "unidirectionnal,"--->"unidirectional,"
>

done


>
> [Page 10], Section 3.10.5, Typo
> "range sould"-->"range should"
> "recommandation"-->"recommendation"
>

done

>
> [Page 10], Section 3.10.5, Typo
> "the the"-->"the"
>

done

>
> [Page 10], Section 4, Typo
> "idenfied"-->"identified"
>

done

>
> [Page 33], Typo x2
> "bidirectionnal is forbiden"-->"bidirectional is forbidden"
>

don't find, should have corrected before