[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-packet-pw-03

Pete McCann <mccap@petoni.org> Wed, 14 March 2012 00:41 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-packet-pw-03
Reviewer: Pete McCann
Review Date: March 13, 2012
IETF LC End Date:
IESG Telechat date: March 15, 2012

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 2:
  In this model LSRs, LSR1 and LSR2,
SHOULD BE:
  In this model LSR1 and LSR2

  The PEs, PE1 and PE2
SHOULD BE:
  PE1 and PE2

  used to transport all of the required layer 2 and layer
  3 between protocols between LSR1 and LSR2.
SHOULD BE:
  used to transport all of the required layer 2 and layer
  3 protocols between LSR1 and LSR2.

Section 3:
  client equipments will the follow normal practice
SHOULD BE:
  client equipments will follow the normal practice

Section 4:
A better caption for figure 2 would be, "The internal structure of a PW PE
with integrated client LSR"

Section 5:
  The client network work layer packet encapsulation
SHOULD BE:
  The client network layer packet encapsulation

  value lower Ethernet address
SHOULD BE:
  lower value Ethernet address

Appendix A:
  rational
SHOULD BE:
  rationale

  no more that four
SHOULD BE:
  no more than four