Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6-04

"MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)" <acm@research.att.com> Wed, 23 May 2018 13:39 UTC

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From: "MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)" <acm@research.att.com>
To: Francesca Palombini <francesca.palombini@ericsson.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6-04
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Hi Francesca,
one last item to resolve, we should be good now.
see below,
Al

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Francesca Palombini [mailto:francesca.palombini@ericsson.com]
> Sent: Friday, April 27, 2018 3:44 AM
> To: MORTON, ALFRED C (AL) <acm@research.att.com>;; gen-art@ietf.org
> Cc: ippm@ietf.org; ietf@ietf.org; draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6.all@ietf.org
> Subject: RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6-04
> 
> Hi Al,
> 
> Thanks for your reply.
> I cut selected parts of the email to detail some of my comments, see
> inline.
> 
> Francesca
> 
...snip...
> > > To be consistent with the first bullet of the list above ("It includes
> > > a valid IP header: see below for version-specific criteria."), I would
> > > rephrase the text above with something on the lines of:
> > >
> > > "For an IPvX (...) packet to be standard-formed, the IPvX-specific
> > > criteria for a valid IP header are:"
> > [acm]
> > Your wording suggestion dropped the clear indication of a requirement.
> > We are using the RFC2119 terms consistently for requirements.
> >
> 
> I was trying to point out that the first part of the section (first bullet
> list) does not use RFC2119 terms. I read the second bullet list as a "sub-
> list" of the first one, which is why I was suggesting removing the
> REQUIRED term. Or you could rephrase the first list to use REQUIRED too.
> Anyway, this is nit-picking. Feel free to disregard.
> 
[acm]
I see your point now, and I changed the sentence introducing the 
initial (IP version-agnostic list) to read:

A packet is standard-formed if it meets all of the following REQUIRED criteria: