[Gen-art] Gen-ART telechatl review of draft-ietf-appsawg-rfc7001bis-08

Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Fri, 08 May 2015 00:18 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-appsawg-rfc7001bis-07.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2015-05-08
IETF LC End Date: 2015-05-05
IESG Telechat date: 2015-05-14

Summary: Almost ready
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Comments:
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It seems the author didn't see my Last Call review, so this review has not changed.

As the writeup says, this is an update to a long document that mainly resolves a
notified erratum and some oversights in the previous version's IANA material.
Therefore I did not review the whole document. As far as I can tell, the changes
reflect the description in the writeup. (I assume that IANA will work with the
author to get the registry updates exactly right.)

Minor Issue:
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IMHO the "Change History" section should be summarised in a "Changes since RFC7001"
section (rather than being deleted).

Nit:
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6.7.  SMTP Enhanced Stauts Codes

s/Stauts/Status/