Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03

Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> Thu, 01 September 2016 08:15 UTC

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Thanks for the reviews & fixes!

Jari

On 04 Aug 2016, at 17:57, Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote:

> Hi,
>   Many thanks.
> 
> Best,
> Meral
> 
> From: Pal Martinsen (palmarti) [mailto:palmarti@cisco.com]
> Sent: Wednesday, August 03, 2016 11:55 PM
> To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
> Cc: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness.all@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
> 
> 
> On 05 Jul 2016, at 17:46, Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote:
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
> 
> For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
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> 
> Document:  draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2016-07-05
> IETF LC End Date:  2016-07-08
> IESG Telechat date: NA
> 
> 
> Summary:
> This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some comments.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> -[Page 2], “arguable be better"---->"arguably be better"
> Fixed
> 
> -[Page 2], “types know"---->"types known"
> Fixed
> 
> -[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice?
> Sort of. Theee sections are implementation details and will be removed in the published RFC.
> 
> 
> -[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to be updated to latest version.
> -Also on [Page 4] Reference to “section 4.1.2.1" of [I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be good to list the section title too (in case the numbering changes in the final version).
> Good point. Fixed.
> 
> 
> New version uploaded. It also contains fixes from the secdir review.
> 
> .-.
> Pål-Erik
> 
> 
> 
> Best Regards,
> Meral
> ---
> Meral Shirazipour
> Ericsson Research
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