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From: Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net>
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Date: Thu, 1 Sep 2016 11:15:53 +0300
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To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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Cc: "Pal Martinsen \(palmarti\)" <palmarti@cisco.com>,
 "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>,
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of
 draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
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Thanks for the reviews & fixes!

Jari

On 04 Aug 2016, at 17:57, Meral Shirazipour =
<meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote:

> Hi,
>   Many thanks.
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> Best,
> Meral
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> From: Pal Martinsen (palmarti) [mailto:palmarti@cisco.com]
> Sent: Wednesday, August 03, 2016 11:55 PM
> To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
> Cc: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness.all@tools.ietf.org; =
gen-art@ietf.org
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of =
draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
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> On 05 Jul 2016, at 17:46, Meral Shirazipour =
<meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> wrote:
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> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area =
Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the =
IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any =
other last call comments.
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> For more information, please see the FAQ at =
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
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> Document:  draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-03
> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2016-07-05
> IETF LC End Date:  2016-07-08
> IESG Telechat date: NA
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> Summary:
> This draft is ready to be published as BCP RFC but I have some =
comments.
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> Major issues:
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> Minor issues:
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> Nits/editorial comments:
> -[Page 2], =93arguable be better"---->"arguably be better"
> Fixed
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> -[Page 2], =93types know"---->"types known"
> Fixed
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> -[Page 8], Section 7.1 and 7.2 have the same title, is that by choice?
> Sort of. Theee sections are implementation details and will be removed =
in the published RFC.
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> -[Page 9], Section 10.1, first reference ([I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis])to =
be updated to latest version.
> -Also on [Page 4] Reference to =93section 4.1.2.1" of =
[I-D.ietf-ice-rfc5245bis], it would be good to list the section title =
too (in case the numbering changes in the final version).
> Good point. Fixed.
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> New version uploaded. It also contains fixes from the secdir review.
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> .-.
> P=E5l-Erik
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> Best Regards,
> Meral
> ---
> Meral Shirazipour
> Ericsson Research
> www.ericsson.com
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