Re: [Gen-art] [dhcwg] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-pd-relay-requirements-04

ianfarrer@gmx.com Mon, 14 December 2020 16:45 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [dhcwg] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-pd-relay-requirements-04
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HI Ron,

Thanks for the review and comments.  Please see inline below.

Ian

> On 12. Dec 2020, at 16:44, Roni Even via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Roni Even
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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> Document: draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-pd-relay-requirements-??
> Reviewer: Roni Even
> Review Date: 2020-12-12
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-14
> IESG Telechat date: 2020-12-17
> 
> Summary: The document is ready for publication with nits as a standard track RFC
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 1. first sentence in section  3.5 "If the client loses information about a
> prefix that it is delegated ..." not clear "it is”

[if - Suggested reword:

If the client loses information about an an active prefix lease it has been delegated...

]

> 2. section 7 "This document
> does not add any new security considerations beyond those mentioned in Section
> 22 of [RFC8213]." RFC8213 does not have section 22 , did you mean of RFC8415?

[if - RFC8213 is correct. The draft has been updated just to reference RFC8213, rather than
any specific section as the whole document is relevant.]

> 
> 3.  In section 7 are there any security requirements for the operational
> interface requirements from section 4.4?

[if -  Good point. How about adding a reference recommending that RFC4778 (Current Operational Security Practices in             
Internet Service Provider Environments) is implemented?]

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