[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-lisp-interworking-03.txt
"Miguel A. Garcia" <Miguel.A.Garcia@ericsson.com> Fri, 17 February 2012 08:39 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-lisp-interworking-03.txt
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-lisp-interworking-03.txt Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.garcia@ericsson.com> Review Date: 2012-02-17 IETF LC End Date: 2012-02-23 IESG Telechat date: 2012-03-01 Summary: The document is ready for publication as an experimental RCFc. Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: - Section 5.2 describes a sequence of packet flows. I think it would be easier to understand if there is a companion figure to which the text can refer to. Otherwise, the reader has to compose this figure in his mind. - Please expand acronyms at first occurrence. This includes: RLOC, CRIO - Perhaps the terminology section should include RLOC, xTR, ETR, ITR, DFZ - Idnits reveals a number of unused references: LIPS-MS, RFC4632, LISP-DEPLOY, RFC4787, RFC5382. They should be deleted. - Idnits reveals an obsolete reference: RFC 2434 (Obsoleted by RFC 5226) - Idnits reveals a number of instances where IP addresses are not compliant with RFC 5735. I am trying to identify which ones of these are. I guess they are the 220.x.x.x, 128.x.x.x EIDs. I think most of them are technically EIDs for LISP-NR, LISP-R LISP-NAT, etc. I don't know if RFC 5735 applies to this draft or not, I am just letting you know in case you need to fix something. BR, Miguel -- Miguel A. Garcia +34-91-339-3608 Ericsson Spain
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-lisp-inter… Miguel A. Garcia
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-lisp-i… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-lisp-i… Darrel Lewis