Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-straw-b2bua-stun-06.txt

"Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)" <rmohanr@cisco.com> Sun, 17 May 2015 15:02 UTC

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From: "Ram Mohan R (rmohanr)" <rmohanr@cisco.com>
To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Thanks Francis. I will address the below nits in the next revision.

Ram

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From: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>
Date: Sunday, 17 May 2015 6:35 pm
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Subject: review of draft-ietf-straw-b2bua-stun-06.txt
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>I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
>Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
>
><http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>
>Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
>you may receive.
>
>Document: draft-ietf-straw-b2bua-stun-06.txt
>Reviewer: Francis Dupont
>Review Date: 20150515
>IETF LC End Date: 20150513
>IESG Telechat date: 20150514??
>
>Summary: Ready
>
>Major issues: None
>
>Minor issues: None
>
>Nits/editorial comments:
> I reviewed the 06 version.
>
> - 1 page 3: signalling -> signaling
>
> - 4.1 page 5: after the terminology section it is recommended to avoid
>  lower case keywords (e.g., the may in "A B2BUA may be in").
>
> - 4.4 page 11: a may and a should...
>
> - authors' addresses pages 13 and 14: India is the full country name,
>  US the ISO IS 3166 code (the full name is USA). The current rule
>  is to use 3166 two letter codes, I raised a concern as the UPU
>  has the opposite rule (full names). Let the RFC Editor to handle this?
>
>Regards
>
>Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr