[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-roll-useofrplinfo-25

Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 03 April 2019 17:34 UTC

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready with Nits

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-ietf-roll-useofrplinfo-25
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2019-04-03
IETF LC End Date: 2019-04-11
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready with Nits

Major Concerns:


Minor Concerns:

Section 1 says:

   ... This document clarifies examples that intend to
   illustrate the result of the normative language in RFC8200 and
   RFC6553.  In other words, the examples are intended to be normative
   explanation of the results of executing that language.

This set the wrong expectation for me.  What the document seems to
be doing is aligning with the recent normative change in RFC8200.  The
alignment could lead to a flag day, and this document suggests a way to
avoid a flag day.  It goes through a whole bunch of use cases to
illustrate the updates.


In Table 6, please move some of the whitespace on the right to the first
column to avoid so many words being split across lines.