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Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Wed, 09 September 2015 18:44 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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Document:draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-id-09
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date:2015-09-09
IETF LC End Date:2015-09-09 
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC, but I have some editorial comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 6] line 7, "the the Identification"--extra 'the'-->"the Identification"
-[Page 15], Appendix A., "the the algorithm specified"-extra 'the'-->"the algorithm specified"
-[Page 16], "(assumming the"--->"(assuming the"
-[Page 16], would be useful to have figure captions if the message exchanges are figures as referred to in the text.
-General, please spell out acronyms at first use, e.g. PRNG, DoS etc.


Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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