[Gen-art] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-softwire-yang-13

Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Sun, 30 December 2018 07:39 UTC

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Reviewer: Roni Even
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-softwire-yang-??
Reviewer: Roni Even
Review Date: 2018-12-29
IETF LC End Date: 2018-10-11
IESG Telechat date: 2019-01-10

Summary:

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. From my previous review -  Ian responded that this will be addressed but I
did not see that it was:  In section 1 it says that the YANG data model can be
used with netconf , I noticed that restconf is only mentioned in the security
section as network management. why not add restconf to introduction? 2.  In
section 2 " The adopts the Network Management Datastore Architecture (NMDA)"
there is a word missing?