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[Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: review of https://pad.isc.org/p/Kea_Planning_2018-01-25 (update)

Benoit Claise <bclaise@cisco.com> Fri, 26 January 2018 08:29 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis: Re: review of https://pad.isc.org/p/Kea_Planning_2018-01-25 (update)
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Hi Francis,
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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> Document: draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8022bis-09.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20180123
> IETF LC End Date: 20180115
> IESG Telechat date: 20180125
>
> Summary: Ready
>
> Major issues: None
>
> Minor issues: None
>
> Nits/editorial comments: (update)
>   I noted these on the 06 version but I refer to 09 (last) version which
> has been published since my review.
>
>   - 2 page 3: update RFC 2119 by RFC 8174 (or leave the RFC Editor to do
>    this)
>
>   - Appendix E page 74 (twice): control-plane-protocl -> control-plane-protocol
Good catch.
I introduced an IESG note for this.

Regards, Benoit
>
> I trust Yangdoctor about yang correctness.
>
> Thanks
>
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
> .
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