Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt

Christer Holmberg <> Mon, 11 July 2016 19:02 UTC

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Hi Francis,

Thanks for your review! Please see inline.

>I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews 
>all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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>Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt
>Reviewer: Francis Dupont
>Review Date: 20160707
>IETF LC End Date: 20160708
>IESG Telechat date: unknown
>Summary: Ready
>Major issues: None
>Minor issues: None
>Nits/editorial comments:
>- 4.4 page 5: I am not sure that "The offerer might e.g. send a new offer"
>is correct (i.e., is a comma required? where?) I leave this to
>the RFC Editor...

I actually also think that the commas are not required, so I'll remove them.

> - 5.2 page 6 and 5.3 page 7: I'd like to get titles on same pages than
> updates. IMHO it is an unwanted side-effect of a device which forces
> OLD nd NEW TEXTs to be on same pages. Something else for teh RFC Editor...

I'll try to fix it now, as there will anyway be other fixes (as described above and below).

> - 5.2 page 7: my spell checker complains about signalled but as it is
>  in the OLD TEXT there is no serious reasons to not get it in the NEW one.

I'll fix that.

> - 5.3 page 8: "a=candidiate:" -> "a=candidate:"

I'll fix as suggested.