[Gen-art] Genart LC review draft-ietf-eppext-keyrelay-10

[Robert Sparks <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-eppext-keyrelay-10
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 25Nov2015
IETF LC End Date: 4Dec2015
IESG Telechat date: (not yet scheduled)

Summary: Ready for publication as Proposed Standard with nits

This is a small nit, but please consider changing the document to 
address it. The motivation for this extension leans on improving the 
security of transferring information between registrars. It should be 
recast as providing better automation and reliability instead. In 
practice (and I think in specification), it hinges on passing a password 
from the registrar of record to the gaining registrar through some 
unspecified means (though typically through the registrant). That 
password is required to be placed in the create by the gaining registrar 
as specified in this document in order for that create to succeed at the 
registry. While it would be impractical and error-prone, the same 
channel that was used to hand this password around _could_ be used to 
pass the keying material this extension addresses.

Reading draft-koch-dnsop-operator-change (an informational reference 
currently) helped greatly with understanding this document. That draft 
expired in 2014. Please be sure it advances, and consider making it a 
normative reference.
If it is not going to move forward, consider pulling some of the 
transfer mechanic recommendations and the definitions of losing/gaining 
entities into this draft, unless they've already made it into the RFC 
series somewhere else?

The security considerations document says a server SHOULD NOT perform 
any transformation on data under server management when processing a 
<keyrelay:create> command. Can this point to more detailed discussion 
somewhere? Why is this not a MUST NOT? (What are the conditions where 
violating the SHOULD NOT is the right thing to do? What are the risks a 
server takes if it performs such a transformation?)

Micro-nit : In section 2.1 where you say "The <expiry> element MUST 
contain one of the following", consider saying "The <expiry> element 
MUST contain exactly one of the following".

RjS