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From: Balázs Varga A <balazs.a.varga@ericsson.com>
To: Paul Kyzivat <pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu>, "draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-tsn.all@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-tsn.all@ietf.org>
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Hi Paul,
Many thanks for your review. I will update the next version with the nits.
Thanks
Bala'zs

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Subject: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-tsn-05

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-tsn-05
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2021-02-05
IETF LC End Date: 2021-02-05
IESG Telechat date: ?

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication.

General:

I'm unqualified to meaningfully comment on the technical quality of this document. I've reviewed it for form.

Issues:

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits:  2

1) NIT: Unlinked references

In section 1 paragraph 2, and section 3 paragraph 1, there are references to [RFC8939] that are not linked.

2) NIT: From IdNits

IdNits reports:

   == Outdated reference: A later version (-14) exists of
      draft-ietf-detnet-security-12

There are a couple of other warnings, but they are spurious.

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