Re: [Gen-art] [Last-Call] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pim-rfc8736bis-01

Alvaro Retana <alvaro.retana@futurewei.com> Tue, 16 May 2023 15:00 UTC

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From: Alvaro Retana <alvaro.retana@futurewei.com>
To: "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>, Mallory Knodel <mknodel@cdt.org>
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Thanks Mallory for the review!

Alvaro.


On May 16, 2023 at 8:49:43 AM, Mallory Knodel via Datatracker (noreply@ietf.org<mailto:noreply@ietf.org>) wrote:

Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-pim-rfc8736bis-??
Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review Date: 2023-05-16
IETF LC End Date: 2023-05-11
IESG Telechat date: 2023-05-25

Summary: This document obsoletes another and is nearly identical in text and
format, except for the critical text that has been updated. Therefore I think
very few changes can or even should be made other than the incisive changes
proposed by the authors. Only two small editorial suggestions: one is a
stylistic choice and up to the discretion of the authors and the second is a
typographical error.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

* It's unclear why message type names appear in parenthesis, rather than
simply without, in sub-sections 4.x. * In IANA Considerations, "non- default"
should be "non-default".


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