[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ospf-yang-23

Erik Kline via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 17 July 2019 23:07 UTC

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Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-ospf-yang-??
Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review Date: 2019-07-17
IETF LC End Date: 2019-07-17
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat


Major issues:

Minor issues:

I feel like the "version" text in 2.3 was confusing.  The first thing I did was
glance back up the overview where I (a) didn't see "version" mentioned and (b)
initially thought that "af" was maybe a proxy for "version".

But then later on it seems that "version" is only a mandatory property of the

I'm not sure that I have concretely useful suggestions for improving this text,
and in fact it might well be that for expected readers of the document this is
in fact a non-issue.  Just thought I'd relay my experience.

Nits/editorial comments:

Page 25: NMDA RFC is 8342, not 8242.

Page 81: references draft-ietf-bdf-yang-xx.txt. This is referenced
elsewhere in the doc (correctly), so I think just remove the -xx may
be fine?