[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-krb-wg-gss-cb-hash-agility-08.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Tue, 15 November 2011 10:21 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on 
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Document: draft-ietf-krb-wg-gss-cb-hash-agility-08.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20111105
IETF LC End Date: 20111107
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2: please get a rule about caps and keep it (i.e.,
  either put a cap only in the first word or to all words, and avoid
  considerations and Considerations in two following lines :-)

 - Toc page 2 and 6 page 10: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 3 page 7: ecryption -> encryption

 - Author's Address page 11: US -> USA

BTW if you find a way (or someone) to improve the general wording style,
please do it (a document of this length should be more pleasant to read