[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lsr-isis-rfc5306bis-04

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-lsr-isis-rfc5306bis-04
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2019-08-15
IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-27
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

Summary: Ready with Nits

Major Concerns:

None


Minor Concerns:

None


Nits:

Section 3.2.3: The lettered paragraphs at the top of the section
begin with lower case letters, but the lettered paragraphs at the
top of the section begin with upper case letters.  Please be
consistent.

Section 3.2.3: s/time after which the adjacency will now expire/
                /time after which the adjacency will expire/

Section 3.2.3 says:

   ... It
   is therefore useful to signal a planned restart (if the forwarding
   plane on the restarting router is maintained) so that ...

I suggest:

   ... If
   the forwarding plane on the restarting router is maintained, it
   is useful to signal a planned restart so that ...