Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-murchison-nntp-compress-05.txt

Julien ÉLIE <julien@trigofacile.com> Mon, 26 September 2016 20:13 UTC

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Bonjour Francis,

First of all, thanks for your review.


> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - ToC page 2 and A page 21: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

I'm using xml2rfc with <?rfc rfcedstyle="yes" ?> that enforces 
"Acknowledgements".  It then seems that the current preferences of the 
RFC Editor have changed.  I'll deactivate that option, and verify it 
does not break something else elsewhere.


>  - 2.2.1 page 5: e.g. -> e.g.,
>
>  - 3 page 11: e.g, -> e.g.,
>
>  - 7.1.1 page 15: I strongly suggest to not name the algorithm X,
>   i.e., Subject: Registration of NNTP compression algorithm X -> Z

OK.


>  - 7.1.2 page 16: if you can do that (or ask the RFC Editor):
>   insert a line break before "(<ietf-" in place than between
>   this and "nntp@...".

Yes, I can do that with an unbreakable hyphen "(<ietf&nbhy;nntp@...".


>  - Authors' Addresses: I suggest to change US into USA. BTW if you
>   prefer ISO IS 3166 2 letter codes you should change France into FR

Noted.


> PS: about the not ASCII characters in Authors' Addresses, you can (should)
> ask the RFC Editor for guidelines (I know things are changing about
> this point but not what will be implemented before the publication
> of this document...)

Thanks for the piece of advice.
Should I contact the RFC Editor right now, or once the document will 
reach them?

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Julien ÉLIE

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