Re: [Gen-art] [dhcwg] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-pd-relay-requirements-04

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Thu, 17 December 2020 02:37 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Roni, thanks for your review. Ian, thanks for your response. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa


> On Dec 14, 2020, at 11:45 AM, ianfarrer@gmx.com wrote:
> 
> HI Ron,
> 
> Thanks for the review and comments.  Please see inline below.
> 
> Ian
> 
>> On 12. Dec 2020, at 16:44, Roni Even via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
>> 
>> Reviewer: Roni Even
>> Review result: Ready with Nits
>> 
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
>> like any other last call comments.
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>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
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>> Document: draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-pd-relay-requirements-??
>> Reviewer: Roni Even
>> Review Date: 2020-12-12
>> IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-14
>> IESG Telechat date: 2020-12-17
>> 
>> Summary: The document is ready for publication with nits as a standard track RFC
>> 
>> Major issues:
>> 
>> Minor issues:
>> 
>> Nits/editorial comments:
>> 1. first sentence in section  3.5 "If the client loses information about a
>> prefix that it is delegated ..." not clear "it is”
> 
> [if - Suggested reword:
> 
> If the client loses information about an an active prefix lease it has been delegated...
> 
> ]
> 
>> 2. section 7 "This document
>> does not add any new security considerations beyond those mentioned in Section
>> 22 of [RFC8213]." RFC8213 does not have section 22 , did you mean of RFC8415?
> 
> [if - RFC8213 is correct. The draft has been updated just to reference RFC8213, rather than
> any specific section as the whole document is relevant.]
> 
>> 
>> 3.  In section 7 are there any security requirements for the operational
>> interface requirements from section 4.4?
> 
> [if -  Good point. How about adding a reference recommending that RFC4778 (Current Operational Security Practices in             
> Internet Service Provider Environments) is implemented?]
> 
>> 
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