Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-dispatch-rfc7315-updates
Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Tue, 12 July 2016 16:46 UTC
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From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>
To: Ralph Droms <rdroms.ietf@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-dispatch-rfc7315-updates
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Hi Ralph, ... >Yes. I had missed that 3.3.2 and 3.3.3 come from 3GPP. The doc makes perfect sense to me now. > >Thanks for the clarification and I think the doc is ready for publication considering our agreement on the editorial nits. Thank You! :) Regards, Christer Nits/editorial comments: > In section 3.2, it would reduce potential confusion to consistently name the header field referenced in each bullet; e.g.: > > OLD: > > o P-Called-Party-ID: Delete statement that the header field can > appear in SIP responses. Add statement that the P-Called-Party-ID > header field can appear in the SIP REFER method. > > NEW: > > o P-Called-Party-ID: Delete statement that the P-Called-Party-ID > header field can appear in SIP responses. Add statement that > the P-Called-Party-ID header field can appear in the SIP REFER method. I'll fix as suggested. >Section 3.3.1: > >OLD: > >This following sections describe, for individual P- header fields, > the 3GPP use-cases that are base for the updates. > >NEW: > > The following sections describe, for individual P- header fields, > the 3GPP use-cases that are the basis for the updates. I'll fix as suggested. > Section 3.3.2: uniformly capitalize "Network Provided Location Information". I'll fix as suggested. > Section 3.3.2: 3GPP TS 23.228 needs a citation of the referenced document. I'll add the reference. Thanks! Regards, Christer
- [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-dispat… Ralph Droms
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-di… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-di… Christer Holmberg
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-di… Ralph Droms
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-holmberg-di… Christer Holmberg