[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-idr-te-pm-bgp-15

Erik Kline <ek@google.com> Thu, 13 December 2018 07:30 UTC

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Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-idr-te-pm-bgp-??
Reviewer: Erik Kline
Review Date: 2018-12-12
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-12
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Seems like a fairly straightforward detailing of TLVs the meanings of
which are defined elsewhere.

Major issues:  [obvious] A primary normative reference is itself still a draft.
 I expect they'll get published together.

Minor issues: None.

Nits/editorial comments: Some wording on Section 3 could use some readability
cleanup, perhaps.

[1] "represent the state and resources availability" does not somehow scan well
for me. "state and resource availability"? "state and availability of
resources"?

[2] "are assumed to have all the required security and authentication
mechanism" also seems like it could read more smoothly.  "are assumed to have
implemented all require security and authentication mechanisms..."?

I'm sure the editors will have better ideas.