[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-vpls-seamless-integ-05
Pete Resnick <email@example.com> Wed, 19 December 2018 16:15 UTC
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Reviewer: Pete Resnick Review result: Ready with Issues I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-vpls-seamless-integ-0 Reviewer: Pete Resnick Review Date: 2018-12-19 IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-18 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Ready with some nits, but one process issue/query. Major issues: None Minor issues: This document is intended for Proposed Standard. It doesn't have protocol as much as operational configuration information for integration. RFC 2026 section 5 says: The BCP subseries of the RFC series is designed to be a way to standardize practices and the results of community deliberations. [...] Historically Internet standards have generally been concerned with the technical specifications for hardware and software required for computer communication across interconnected networks. However, since the Internet itself is composed of networks operated by a great variety of organizations, with diverse goals and rules, good user service requires that the operators and administrators of the Internet follow some common guidelines for policies and operations. That sounds like what this document is doing. It also sounds like this document is unlike to advance to Internet Standard, as there's not the kind of iterative implementation that protocols go through. It's not a big deal either way, but this does seem better suited to a BCP. Nits/editorial comments: Abstract: s/draft/document/g Introduction: "Many Service Providers (SPs) who...". You don't use "SP" anywhere else in the document, and other places where you use the phrase it isn't capitalized. Suggest just saying "Many service providers who..." §1, Definitions: (PBB-)VPLS: refers to both, PBB-VPLS and VPLS. As for EVPN, this abbreviation is used when the text applies to both technologies. It says EVPN in the second sentence. I don't understand. Did you mean VPLS? §2: The 4 "MUST"s and 1 "MAY" aren't requirements on the implementation; they're the requirements this document will satisfy. Seems like they shouldn't be capitalized. §3.2, second bullet, 3.4.1, last paragraph, §4.2, second bullet, and §4.4.1, last paragraph: Why are the "must"s not capitalized?
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