[Gen-art] (summary) review of draft-ietf-multimob-igmp-mld-tuning-05.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Sat, 24 March 2012 10:15 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on 
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-multimob-igmp-mld-tuning-05.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120321
IETF LC End Date: 20120320
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Not Ready

Major issues: the wording of the document is too poor and can lead to
confusion. The use of RFC 2119 key words is bad, in particular for MAYs.

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

PS: I'll send the full review as soon as I have the time.