[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ospf-lls-interface-id-06.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 11 October 2018 09:02 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ospf-lls-interface-id-06.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-ospf-lls-interface-id-06.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20181005 IETF LC End Date: 20181010 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: I reviewed the version 06 but the version 07 is available so I am trying to update my comments to the last version: - Abstract page 1: add "(LLS)" after "link-local signalling" - Requirement Language: usually it is in its own section in the body. I leave this to the RFC Editor, i.e. if it should be moved (s)he will do this. - ToC page 3 and 7 page 5: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 2: in theory you should introduce the LSA abbrev but as the whole document is about OSPF IMHO there is no strict requirement to introduce OSPF specific common abbrevs... - 1 page 3: add "(LLS)" after "link-local signalling" (note the Abstract is independent so the LLS abbrev should be introduced twice and at its first use). - Authors' page 7: BE -> Belgium (for consistency with other addresses) Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ospf-lls-interface… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ospf-lls-inter… Peter Psenak
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ospf-lls-inter… Alissa Cooper