[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-15

Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Thu, 03 January 2019 22:57 UTC

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-15
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2019-01-03
IETF LC End Date: 2019-01-16 
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost Ready


Major Concerns:

None.


Minor Concerns:

Section 2: Please update the first paragraph to reference RFC 8174
in addition to RFC 2119, as follows: 

   The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
   "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "NOT RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and
   "OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in
   BCP 14 [RFC2119] [RFC8174] when, and only when, they appear in all
   capitals, as shown here.


Nits:

Section 1: s/It should be noted that in/In/

Section 1 uses one style for listing two properties, and then Section 3
uses another style for listing four types of IP address.  Please pick
one style and use it in both places.

Section 4.1: s/secsc(/setsc(/  -- in a comment


Questions:

Should getsc() also be described in Section 6?

Should anything be added to the Security Considerations about CGA?