[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-15

Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com> Thu, 03 January 2019 22:57 UTC

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Almost Ready

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-15
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2019-01-03
IETF LC End Date: 2019-01-16 
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost Ready

Major Concerns:


Minor Concerns:

Section 2: Please update the first paragraph to reference RFC 8174
in addition to RFC 2119, as follows: 

   The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
   "OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in
   BCP 14 [RFC2119] [RFC8174] when, and only when, they appear in all
   capitals, as shown here.


Section 1: s/It should be noted that in/In/

Section 1 uses one style for listing two properties, and then Section 3
uses another style for listing four types of IP address.  Please pick
one style and use it in both places.

Section 4.1: s/secsc(/setsc(/  -- in a comment


Should getsc() also be described in Section 6?

Should anything be added to the Security Considerations about CGA?