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Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Tue, 21 January 2020 16:23 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Francis, thank you for your review. Tommy, thank you for addressing Francis’ comments. I entered a DISCUSS ballot to resolve a small issue with one of the references.

Best,
Alissa


> On Jan 6, 2020, at 12:59 PM, Tommy Pauly <tpauly=40apple.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Hi Francis,
> 
> Thanks for your review! We've posted a new -10 version of the document (https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-10).
> 
>> On Dec 27, 2019, at 12:49 AM, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:
>> 
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
>> like any other last call comments.
>> 
>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
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>> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>> 
>> Document: draft-ietf-intarea-provisioning-domains-09.txt
>> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
>> Review Date: 20191220
>> IETF LC End Date: 20191225
>> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>> 
>> Summary: Ready
>> 
>> Major issues: None
>> 
>> Minor issues: None
>> 
>> Nits/editorial comments:
>> - 3.1 page 6: the real purpose of the R-flag / inclusion of a RA header
>> could be explained before examples of section 5, for instance in the
>> introduction...
> 
> We've added a description of this optional "inner" header to the introduction.
> Thanks for the suggestion!
> 
>> 
>> - 3.4 page 10,3.4.3 page 11 (3 times) and 6 page 22 : e.g. -> e.g.,
> 
> Fixed =)
>> 
>> - 4.4 page 17: I understand the text about the Subject Name (so it
>> is not a minor issue) but RFC 5280 defines the Subject as a X.500
>> Distinguished Name so IMHO you mean the Subject Alternative Name.
>> I propose to add "(Alternative)" between "Subject" and "Name" so
>> the text should become fully correct without introducing extra /
>> spurious details.
> 
> Updated to reference the Subject Alternate Name.
> 
>> 
>> - 8.3 page 24: Bit position 0, 1 and 2 are reserved -> assigned
> 
> Fixed.
> 
> Best,
> Tommy
> 
>> 
>> Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!
>> 
>> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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