Return-Path: X-Original-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: gen-art@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id EDBFF21F84DC; Sat, 5 May 2012 10:59:01 -0700 (PDT) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -101.22 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-101.22 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[AWL=-0.018, BAYES_00=-2.599, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, MIME_QP_LONG_LINE=1.396, USER_IN_WHITELIST=-100] Received: from mail.ietf.org ([12.22.58.30]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id UAho01lU9z8U; Sat, 5 May 2012 10:59:01 -0700 (PDT) Received: from rufus.isode.com (cl-125.lon-03.gb.sixxs.net [IPv6:2a00:14f0:e000:7c::2]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id D5A5621F85E1; Sat, 5 May 2012 10:59:00 -0700 (PDT) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; t=1336240739; d=isode.com; s=selector; i=@isode.com; bh=z0FQpR/wyCzitOypN2B4QaTPk+OJW9jO4VXIVPzCu2g=; h=From:Sender:Reply-To:Subject:Date:Message-ID:To:Cc:MIME-Version: In-Reply-To:References:Content-Type:Content-Transfer-Encoding: Content-ID:Content-Description; b=DUTtmrOzBl2xHG9dpWUz/DbmbOQbwCp922yj7YkXbNdM+ow3S7apkdsdrI4hP5dLWfsDac 73PEmLH8KYFi2WPNvVAAL46/cpx27o2OLeHCGqUInE521HO/4LLYeZM1VRUiI+CU2GMFp3 LLDLHOsQYNPH3ACAF/Yns8iTT/L6UOE=; Received: from [188.28.202.123] (188.28.202.123.threembb.co.uk [188.28.202.123]) by rufus.isode.com (submission channel) via TCP with ESMTPSA id ; Sat, 5 May 2012 18:58:59 +0100 References: <01b401cd13d3$322bc950$96835bf0$@isode.com> <3B677B5C-CC21-4252-B343-C6C4A57BBE5B@isode.com> <021901cd1447$39b550f0$ad1ff2d0$@isode.com> <24541053-C0B1-47B3-B866-19E0909BB176@isode.com> <021f01cd1491$13104820$3930d860$@isode.com> In-Reply-To: <021f01cd1491$13104820$3930d860$@isode.com> Message-Id: X-Mailer: iPad Mail (9B176) From: Alexey Melnikov Date: Sat, 5 May 2012 18:58:51 +0100 To: "Gen-art@ietf.org" , "draft-ietf-netext-access-network-option.all@tools.ietf.org" MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary=Apple-Mail-0EA4160C-1829-4002-953A-92DA5766DA08 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Cc: "iesg@ietf.org" Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-netext-access-network-option-10.txt X-BeenThere: gen-art@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.12 Precedence: list List-Id: "GEN-ART: General Area Review Team" List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Sat, 05 May 2012 17:59:02 -0000 --Apple-Mail-0EA4160C-1829-4002-953A-92DA5766DA08 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at . Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-netext-access-network-option-10.txt Reviewer: Alexey Melnikov Review Date: 5 May 2012 IETF LC End Date: 9 May 2012 IESG Telechat date: Unknown Summary: This draft is ready as a Proposed Standard Major issues: none Minor issues: Minor: [ANI] and [TS23003] seem to be Normative (as per their use in 3.1.1) Nits/editorials: 1. Introduction This document defines a new mobility option, the Access Network Identifier (ANI) option and its sub-options for Proxy Mobile IPv6, that can be used by the mobile access gateway to signal the access network information to the local mobility anchor. The specific details on how the local mobility anchor uses this information are out-of-scope for this document. These mobility options are optional and are not mandatory for the Proxy Mobile IPv6 protocol. Nit: Last sentence: "optional" and "not mandatory" are the same thing on my b= ook. Strictly speaking PEN numbers are not limited to 4 bytes. However you have a= registry for types of identifiers, so a new value can be allocated for bigg= er-than-4-bytes PENs.= --Apple-Mail-0EA4160C-1829-4002-953A-92DA5766DA08 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/html; charset=utf-8
I am the assign= ed Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, plea= se see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfa= q>.

Please resolve these comments al= ong with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

<= /span>Document: draft-ietf-netext-access-network-option-= 10.txt
Reviewer: Alexey Melnikov
Review Date= : 5 May 2012
IETF LC End Date: 9 May 2012
IE= SG Telechat date: Unknown

Summary: Thi= s draft is ready as a Proposed Standard

Maj= or issues: none

Minor issues:

Minor: [ANI] and [TS23003] seem to be Normative (as= per their use in 3.1.1)

Nits= /editorials:

1.  Introduction

   This document defines a new mobility optio= n, the Access Network
   Identifier (ANI) option and its= sub-options for Proxy Mobile IPv6,
   that can be used b= y the mobile access gateway to signal the access
   netw= ork information to the local mobility anchor.  The specific
&= nbsp;  details on how the local mobility anchor uses this information a= re
   out-of-scope for this document.  These mobili= ty options are optional
   and are not mandatory for the= Proxy Mobile IPv6 protocol.

Nit: Last sentence: "o= ptional" and "not mandatory" are the same thing on my book.

Strictly speaking PEN numbers are not limited to 4 bytes. However y= ou have a registry for types of identifiers, so a new value can be allocated= for bigger-than-4-bytes PENs.
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