Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06

Weijun Wang <weijun.wang@oracle.com> Tue, 06 February 2018 14:17 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06
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I will submit a new draft tomorrow if there is no other feedback.

Thanks
Weijun

> On Jan 29, 2018, at 9:26 AM, Weijun Wang <weijun.wang@oracle.com> wrote:
> 
> The HTML file updated in place.
> 
> Thanks
> Weijun
> 
>> On Jan 27, 2018, at 10:12 AM, Greg Hudson <ghudson@mit.edu> wrote:
>> 
>> On 01/23/2018 06:43 PM, Weijun Wang wrote:
>>> I've uploaded an updated version at
>>> 
>>> http://cr.openjdk.java.net/~weijun/rfc5653bis/draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-07.html
>> 
>> This is a great format for reviewing these changes; thanks for
>> generating it.
>> 
>> Line 416 does not capitalize "optional" in "optional services", but
>> lines 385 and 391 do.
>> 
>> Lines 422 and 424 should probably capitalize "should".  Line 429 should
>> probably capitalize "may".
>> 
>> At line 598, I would lean towards leaving "MUST" in lowercase as we are
>> describing an application requirement, not prescribing one.
>> 
>> Line 1174, I would leave "MAY" in lowercase.
>> 
>> Line 1229, "may" should probably be capitalized.
>> 
>> Line 1369, I would leave "MAY" alone as this seems more descriptive than
>> prescriptive.
>> 
>> Line 3221's use of "SHOULD" is prescriptive, but there's no other way to
>> request the default QOP.  So I would leave it lowercase (or change the
>> wording, but I'm not trying to open any more cans of worms).
>> 
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