[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Fri, 28 October 2011 13:52 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document: draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Oct-28-2011
IETF LC End Date: Nov-01-2011
IESG Telechat date: Nov-03-2011

Summary: This draft is ready as a Proposed Standard.

Major issues: 0
Minor issues: 1
Nits/editorial comments: 1

Minor issues:

- S3.1: "According to this specification ...", I am not sure what "this"
  refers to?  Does it refer to draft-ietf-mip4-nemov4-dynamic or does
  it, instead, refer to rfc5177 (which is the topic of discussion in the
  previous paragraph from where the above is quoted)?

Nits:

- S3.2, third paragraph:
  s/a prefix it MUST/a prefix, it MUST/

Thanks,

- vijay
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