Re: [Gen-art] [dhcwg] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dhc-dhcp4o6-saddr-opt-05

ianfarrer@gmx.com Fri, 05 October 2018 12:37 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [dhcwg] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dhc-dhcp4o6-saddr-opt-05
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Hi Elwyn,

Good catch on the points below. They’re fixed in the new version.

Thanks,
Ian

> On 4. Oct 2018, at 17:31, Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> wrote:
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> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review result: Ready
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> Document: draft-ietf-dhc-dhcp4o6-saddr-opt-05
> Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
> Review Date: 2018-10-04
> IETF LC End Date: 2018-09-07
> IESG Telechat date: 2018-10-11
> 
> Summary:
> Ready. Thanks for addressing my comments from the last call review. There are a
> couple of remaining trivial nits.
> 
> Major issues:
> None.
> 
> Minor issues:
> None.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> S7.5 , para 2: s/The default time minimum time/The default minimum time/
> 
> s10:  I missed a third instance where the following change ought to be made
> (sorry): OLD: in the table at
> https://www.iana.org/assignments/dhcpv6-parameters: NEW: in the Option Codes
> table at https://www.iana.org/assignments/dhcpv6-parameters: ENDS
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