Re: [Gen-art] (summary) review of draft-ietf-multimob-igmp-mld-tuning-05.txt

Hitoshi Asaeda <asaeda@sfc.wide.ad.jp> Sat, 24 March 2012 16:13 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] (summary) review of draft-ietf-multimob-igmp-mld-tuning-05.txt
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Francis,

> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on 
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at 
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
> you may receive.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-multimob-igmp-mld-tuning-05.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20120321
> IETF LC End Date: 20120320
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Not Ready
> 
> Major issues: the wording of the document is too poor and can lead to
> confusion. The use of RFC 2119 key words is bad, in particular for MAYs.
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
> 
> PS: I'll send the full review as soon as I have the time.

The wrong use of 2119 language was pointed out and already resolved.
We sent our modified draft to IESG on March 20.

Now the submissionweb page is closed and hence we've not submitted the
revised draft.

I attach the revised draft and diffs.
Please take a look at these documents.

Thank you for your review.

Regards,
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Hitoshi Asaeda