[Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-avtcore-5761-update-02

Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Thu, 15 September 2016 23:10 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-avtcore-5761-update-02.txt 
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2016/09/15
IETF LC End Date: 2016/09/22
IESG Telechat date: (if known) -

Summary: Ready (apart from a tiny bit of pedantry).

Major issues:None

Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:s3.1: It is a bit pedantic, but 'to be sure, to be sure', add new first line:   In the rest of this section references to Sections 4 and 8 are to sections in [RFC 5761].
s5: s/specifcation/specification/ (sorreee!)Sent from Samsung tablet.