[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nato-nid-02.txt

"Romascanu, Dan (Dan)" <dromasca@avaya.com> Wed, 19 November 2014 12:01 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at



<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.



Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.



Document: draft-murdock-nato-nid-02.txt

Reviewer: Dan Romascanu

Review Date: 11/19/14

IETF LC End Date: 11/19/14

IESG Telechat date: 11/25/14



Summary: Almost Ready



Major issues:



1.       The document does not expand the acronym NATO at the first occurrence. Moreover, in section 7 it mentions 'that a standards body, like NATO' which is misleading - as NATO is not a standards body. I suggest to use the full name in the title and abstract, expand the acronym at first occurrence and correct the text in Section 7.

2.       The abstract and introduction should make clear that this is a request made according to RFC 3406 for a formal URN space type, as described in Section 4.3 of RFC 3406.

3.       As per RFC 3406, section 4.3:



Ø     The proposed template

Ø     should be sent to the:

Ø

Ø        urn-nid@apps.ietf.org

Ø     mailing list to allow for a two week discussion period for clarifying

Ø     the expression of the registration information, before the IESG

Ø     reviews the document.

Ø



I could not find in the summary written by the AD shepherd an indication whether this review occurred.



Minor issues:



Nits/editorial comments:

[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nato-ni… Romascanu, Dan (Dan)
Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nat… Barry Leiba
Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nat… Romascanu, Dan (Dan)
Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nat… Jari Arkko
Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-murdock-nat… Barry Leiba